Post by Worldie on Aug 3, 2014 18:32:36 GMT -8
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Welcome to TND. Your application has been accepted. Ooh boy. Okay, I really like this. I heard you've gone through a lot of revisions but it looks like you came out well on the other side! Thanks for sticking with it! For starters, I love the personality you gave Berwald. I feel like you do him a lot of justice in terms of balancing out how he comes off to other people and how he actually is. And then a splash of temper; I like that. Reminds me of the Vikings. Berwald's background is also really intriguing and I would enjoy seeing you expand on that in the forum; it sounds like he hasn't had an easy time of it but he has learned from his past. Writing in consequences for his actions (jail time and anger management) is also more realistic and I'm glad you added that in. Your RP sample is a little bit dry, but it'll be fine as long as you make the word count minimum in your posts! Again, thanks for your effort—Berwald looks great! The name is Oxenstierna. Berwald Oxenstierna. |
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