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Post by Deleted on Jun 20, 2013 13:18:00 GMT -8
Haha haze jokes. yvy haze, haze, go away.
Haze (hey) there! I would love to see some clear constructive criticism for Clara! (Yeah, it's too early for me to make puns. yvy)
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Post by Deleted on Sept 1, 2013 21:57:03 GMT -8
.................Uh, okay, I know you said you wanted constructive criticism, but I'm going to go on and post this anyways.
So Singapore is a country that I know very little about. The things that always pops into my head when I hear Singapore now is: #1: Bela lives there. #2: Clara.
I rarely saw OCs before TND, but now that I have... Clara is beautifully structured. She's a lovely girl, a prodigy -- no, genius -- and she's just wonderful.
She has such incredible likes, dislikes, fears, and dreams; it really molds and makes her exactly how you want her. She's really come to life, and she's so cute. Bela, your muses always impress me and I feel so small in comparison with my shitty writing, but you never ever only do something halfheartedly.
Her childish sense of justice and her maturity traits are an adorable mix, and it serves purpose to further back up your claim of how she's paradoxical. And how she's inventive, but not artistic!! Ahhhh, it's so great. ;w; <3 Her like of the stars really stood out to me, and it just makes her that much more human, as well as her dislike of the cold, glasses, and waiting. And her dream of learning ten languages? I can really identify with that; I hope she manages to!! Her fear of the dark is understandable and again, really fleshes her out.
You always manage to do such a stunning job with your muses!!! Clara is really brave, and I just love the way she is now. (With the way I'm writing Zoran (Serbia), they'd definitely get along together... We should plot something when I finish him. <3)
AS A CONCLUSION: Clara is brilliant -- both in character and out of character. You should be proud, Bela, you always make me fall in love with you characters. <333 She is a charming, young woman, and you did an amazing job with her. <3333333
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Post by 5.0 on Nov 21, 2013 9:35:47 GMT -8
Clara reminds me way too much of my sister, and I love my sister to pieces, so I already like Clara too. Clara is very realistic, and I find myself more amazed as I read her posts how much she reminds me of my sister. Dialogue, mannerisms, etc.
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